Monday, January 03, 2005

Love, Love, Love

Softly falling into your hands,
I care not to care.

There!
My stab at a love poem!

Like we talked about in tutorial, a very difficult thing to do; this simple two line poem took me the better part of an hour. I tried other longer pieces, blank verse, free verse, haiku, but eventually settled on this simple two-liner. It best captures how I feel about my sweetie; besides the longer pieces I was quickly encountering the enemies of love poetry (for those of you reading this who are not in Prof. Kuin's tutorial, they are: Sincerity, cliche, vocabulary, history and shyness).
Let me know what you all think; the good, the bad and the ugly!

7 Comments:

Blogger marwa said...

sounds like someone who is kind of gloomy about his/her love life. I remember the professor asked the question about why most poetries are just so gloomy..and i remember him saying that when your happy, your busy doing something else, but when your miserable, sad, mad then usually you express whatever is inside you on a piece of paper.
As for these 2 lines i kind of understand it as someone who has fallen in love and cannot love such a person and he/she just cares about leaving this situation alone and doesnt want to let go.
i dont know, i may be wrong

January 6, 2005 at 7:42 PM  
Blogger maggiesong said...

hi Sidd!
I have to tell you that I read this "love poem" of yours yesterday, and the second line of it intrigued me. After doing some thinking about this, I like it. I like it because "caring not to care" to me, shows that you are 'free floating'...there is not in life many experiences or times that allow one to do this. Of course Sidd, you realize that beyond this initial "caring not to care" euphoria, comes the hard part in love - caring to care!

Thanks for posting this poem.

January 8, 2005 at 12:38 AM  
Blogger la said...

Hmmm, very interesting poem there! I tend to disagree with Marwa on this one. I don't think this poem is gloomy, at all! "Softly falling into your hands," represents, to me, two lovers, well they don't HAVE to be lovers, maybe boyfriend and girlfriend, hugging each other, cuddling, touching, whatever you want to call it. The line, "I care not to care," does not represent the idea of not caring for that lover/partner. I think it means that when you're with that person, you don't have a care in the world. All your worries, problems, what have you, are irrelevant, they have no importance while you're with this person. Your concentration is on being with that person, loving that person, and in return, being loved back!

Sidd, I'd love for you to leave an accurate interpretation of what this poem means, I'd like to see how close I was.

I'd also like to commend you on this poem, I think it's really good. It's sooo hard to write minimalist (I think that's what they call it! haha) poems, and still convey some kind of message. Good job! =)

January 8, 2005 at 8:42 AM  
Blogger Sidd Rawte said...

First of all, I want to thank you all for taking the time to read my poem, and taking more time to comment on it! I am deeply humbled.

Merisha, you hit the nail in the head! This poem captures the times when I'm with my sweetie. Of course not every time we are together; but those simple, special times when, for a moment, time stands still and nothing else matters.

To my friend Marge! You bring wonderful wisdom in your comment: "Caring to care" is the hardest/most important part in a relationship. This is a lesson I learned the hard way a couple of years ago.

Marwa, I don't think your interpretation is necessarily wrong. If this is the way poem felt to you, then so be it! Once the words are out, I no longer have any control over how people read it. On the contrary, I feel proud that a poem I wrote has different interpretations to different people. It shows us the power of words!

Thanks again to everyone who commented!

January 8, 2005 at 1:52 PM  
Blogger Rosita Georgieva said...

HI Sidd,

I also like your poem--a short and condensed one, that captures the essence of love: its tenderness and "softly falling" and its paradoxical nature--"care not to care".

January 9, 2005 at 4:23 AM  
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